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1.We can breathe fresh air 2.Country people are pure 3.House prices are lower than downtown 4.We can grow many kinds of vegetables.

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          Give two advantages of living in the countryside.

1.We can breathe fresh air 2.Country people are pure 3.House prices are lower than downtown 4.We can grow many kinds of vegetables.
>> There are several advantages to living in the countryside. First, we can breathe fresh air. Second, most country people are pure and simple. Third, house prices are lower than downtown. Fourth, we can grow many kinds of vegetables. 


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