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My short-term goal is to improve my English skills and get good points on the TOEIC and TOEIC Speaking tests. However, just my proficiency in English is not the last destination of my journey. What¡¯s more important is how to use it. Therefore, I am trying to find what I can do with my English skills. Fortunately, my church has an English worship department and some English-speaking foreigners that I can serve on Sundays. Just off the top of my head, I want to write books about English or English short novels so people worldwide can enjoy my story. I also want English skills to help me have an early retirement.

To make it come true, I write over two English essays at least every day on my Naver Blog. I started to read as many short novels as possible after work. Although I am a father of three children to look after after work, I am doing my best to expose myself to an English environment, let alone taking an English class with foreign teachers.

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Hello Steve. Thank you for taking the time to give your thoughts about the issue. You have such an interesting opinion. I hope that you will get the score that you needed. I must say that you have a good level of English skills already and you kinda use advanced expressions already. Just be careful how you use them and calculate your sentences first.  ^_^
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My short-term goal is to improve my English skills and get good points on the TOEIC and TOEIC Speaking tests. 
>>> Correct.
However, just my proficiency in English is not the last destination of my journey. 
>>> However, my proficiency in English is not the last destination of my journey. 
What¡¯s more important is how to use it. 
>>> Correct.
Therefore, I am trying to find what I can do with my English skills. 
>>> Correct.
Fortunately, my church has an English worship department and some English-speaking foreigners that I can serve on Sundays. 
>>> Correct.
OR
>>Fortunately, my church has an English worship department and some English-speaking foreigners that I worship with on Sundays. 
Just off the top of my head, I want to write books about English or English short novels so people worldwide can enjoy my story. 
>>> Correct.
I also want English skills to help me have an early retirement.
>>> I also want a level of English skills to help me have an early retirement.
To make it come true, I write over two English essays at least every day on my Naver Blog. 
>>> Correct.
I started to read as many short novels as possible after work.
>>> Correct.
Although I am a father of three children to look after after work, I am doing my best to expose myself to an English environment, let alone taking an English class with foreign teachers.
>>> Although, I have three children to look after work, I am doing my best to expose myself to an English environment by taking an English class with foreign teachers.


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