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Should women get plastic surgery to make themselves have a better self-image?

작성자: 김*경
2023-01-06 1165

회원님의 영작문

Before answering the question, I have a question. Are there any other ways for women to improve their images including self-images other than physical surgery? I believe there are many attractivenesses of women physically, mentally, and spiritually. As the old saying goes, beauty is in the eye of the beholder. So if you have a prejudice that men only like physically beautiful women, please reset your perspective on attractiveness.

Nowadays, there are many star instructors related to human relations on TV in Korea. They in unison advise the audience to see a partner who speaks the same language rather than the one with just a nice figure or gorgeous face if they live happily for a long time with their partners. That is, beauty is only skin deep. It really got to me. I couldn’t agree with it anymore.

Back to the first question, what if a woman couldn’t be loved by her boyfriend after physical surgery costing much money? Above all, I strongly recommend learning how to talk with him.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Steve. To answer your first question, I agree with the many other ways to be attractive. Sure! However, as women age, we become concerned about the physical beauty that we are losing because of age. It's not all about attracting our partners but it boosts our self-confidence to see that we still look good. This is especially true if, we have the means (money) to use, so why not enhance? This is my perspective. I couldn't answer for the younger women too. I think using make-up is already good for them.
T. Irene
Before answering the question, I have a question. 
>>> Correct. 
Are there any other ways for women to improve their images including self-images other than physical surgery? 
>>>  Are there any other ways for women to improve their self-images other than physical surgery? 
I believe there are many attractivenesses of women physically, mentally, and spiritually. 
>>> I believe women can be attractive in many ways such as physically, mentally, and spiritually.
As the old saying goes, beauty is in the eye of the beholder. 
>>> Correct.
So if you have a prejudice that men only like physically beautiful women, please reset your perspective on attractiveness.
>>> Correct.
Nowadays, there are many star instructors related to human relations on TV in Korea. 
>>> Nowadays, there are many star instructors in human relations in Korean TV shows. 
They in unison advise the audience to see a partner who speaks the same language rather than the one with just a nice figure or gorgeous face if they live happily for a long time with their partners. 
>>> They, in unison, advise the audience to seek/look for a partner who speaks the same language rather than one with just a nice figure or gorgeous face. This is if they want to live happily for a long time with their partners. 
That is, beauty is only skin deep. 
>>> Thus, I must say that beauty is only skin deep. 
It really got to me. 
>>> It really got into me.
I couldn’t agree with it anymore.
>>>  I couldn’t agree  more.
Back to the first question, what if a woman couldn’t be loved by her boyfriend after physical surgery costing much money? 
>>> Back to the first question, what if a woman still couldn’t be loved by her boyfriend even after a very costly plastic surgery? 
Above all, I strongly recommend learning how to talk with him.
>>> Correct.



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