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The importance of saving money

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If we don't save money, our life will be worse. Because money is a big part of our lives. Our life is mostly made of money. For example, we are hungry, we need some clothes, we need some places to live in, we should pay for them. But if we don't have money, we will be embarrassed. And also we can learn through saving money. we can have financial knowledge. And we can have patient.

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Good morning, Stella ^^
Thank you for writing your homework! 
See you later~ 
-T.Jhozel

If we don't save money, our life will be worse. 
>> If we don't save money, our lives will be worse
Because money is a big part of our lives.
>> Correct!
Our life is mostly made of money. For example, we are hungry, we need some clothes, we need some places to live in, we should pay for them. 
>>Our lives are primarily defined by money. For example, if we are hungry, we need clothes and a place to live, and we must pay for these necessities. 
But if we don't have money, we will be embarrassed.
>>Correct!
>>OR: But we'll be embarrassed if we don't have any money. 
And also we can learn through saving money.  
we can have financial knowledge. And we can have patient.
>> We can also learn financial knowledge by saving money and we can be patient.
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