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Q: What culture do you think is the most polite? Explain
A: I don't know a lot of cultures, so I can't be sure about it, but I think Korean culture is polite enough.
Because, in the U.S. they just say 'Hello' to everyone, but in Korea, people say politely to the elder people.
Also, Korean care about courtesy very much.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I don't know a lot of cultures, so I can't be sure about it, but I think Korean culture is polite enough.

>> I don't know about different kinds of of cultures, so I can't be sure about it, but I think Korean culture is polite enough.
Because, in the U.S. they just say 'Hello' to everyone, but in Korea, people say politely to the elder people.

>> Because, in the U.S. they just say 'Hello' to everyone, but in Korea, people greet the elderly people politely.
Also, Korean care about courtesy very much.

>> Also, Koreans care about courtesy very much.

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