¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿ì
2023-01-03 913

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Hello, T.Donna.
Did you sleep well last night?
Since I had a enough sleep, now I feel very good.
Meanwhile, there is no patient in the clinic sadly.
I hope there will be more patients this afternoon.
I received a text that showed the cost for movement this morning.
They requested almost double cost than expected.
You know this sentence?
There is nothing to be cheap and be good.
Anyway, we are goining to meet another moving company at lunch time.
At that time, we have another meeting with interior team staff.
Because we don't have enough time to eat a lunch, So I am thinking about our lunch seriously.
No patient in the clinic, no food in my stomach.
Back to the topic, when I was young, I prefered a loud, big celebration.
But, now I like a small celebration.
Only cake, drink, food and my family are just enough to celebrate my birthday.
I think that I am tired of big meeting that consists of many people as I got older.
You might like a big celebration, right?
See you tomorrow.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi there once again, Dr. Kim!

Yes, I got ample sleep last night, thanks for asking. It is good to know you did too. A good night sleep is all we need sometimes to begin a perfect day. Well, you are right, we always pay the price of quality. Quality means expensive so, if we want it, we need to be willing toi pay for it. Best of luck with the next company you will meet,

By this time, you might already be having lunch. Some very good savory soup as well as meat or fish and a nice dessert might do. Today, we are heading off to a restaurant to celebate my birthday. So, I have already made up my mind for the menu. As opposed to what you expect, I like small intimate celebrations as well especially for birthdays. However, for children, the more, the better. Since I have witnessed big and grandiose ones in my life in my job, I like it simple and meaningful.

Anyway, my suggestions to your sentences are minimal. Plase go over them carefully. Thank you for making good use of your time in your clinic by writing this composition. See you soon agan! Have a wonderful afternoon!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

Did you sleep well last night?
>> Correct!

Since I had a enough sleep, now I feel very good.
>> Since I had enough sleep, now I feel very good.

Meanwhile, there is no patient in the clinic sadly.
>> Correct!

I hope there will be more patients this afternoon.
>> Correct!

I received a text that showed the cost for movement this morning.
>> Correct!

They requested almost double cost than expected.
>> Correct!

You know this sentence?
>> Correct!

There is nothing to be cheap and be good.
>> There is nothing cheap that is good. 

Anyway, we are goining to meet another moving company at lunch time.
 >> Correct!

At that time, we have another meeting with interior team staff.
>> At that time, we have another meeting with an interior team staff.

Because we don't have enough time to eat a lunch, So I am thinking about our lunch seriously.
>> Because we don't have enough time to eat a lunch, I am thinking about our lunch seriously.

No patient in the clinic, no food in my stomach.
>> Correct!

Back to the topic, when I was young, I prefered a loud, big celebration.
>> Correct!

But, now I like a small celebration.
>> Correct!

Only cake, drink, food and my family are just enough to celebrate my birthday.
>> Correct!

I think that I am tired of big meeting that consists of many people as I got older.
>> Correct!

You might like a big celebration, right?
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
125112 talk about the song you last sang. ¹Ú*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-27 619
125111 1/26 homework À±*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-01-27 636
125110 What do people from other countries usually think of when they... ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 660
125109 2023-1/26 HOMEWORK ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 584
125108 Do you know how to overcome fear? What is the best way? ÀÓ*À± ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 755
125107 What do you fear missing out on the most? ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 4
125106 Gathering ¹Ú*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 749
125105 A financial problem. ±è*´Ô ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 740
125104 Would you rather shop online or go to the physical store? ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 3
125103 Our personality is change living conditions. ±è*¼ö ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 583
125102 homework ¹Ú*°æ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 565
125101 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 682
125100 I think the most overrated holiday is¡¦ ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 579
125099 What do you think is the best movie from your country? Why? ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 508
125098 Do you think there should be a world holiday for everyone on... ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 573
125097 Homework from the Feedback (3) ¹Ú*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 576
125096 What is the best way to deal with feelings of anger? ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 575
125095 What do you worry about getting older? ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 564
125094 What do you think when you look at yourself in the mirror? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 519
125093 What is your favorite Seollal Holiday memory? ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-26 547

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04