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Hello.
How was your day?
As you know, I slept for just a few hours last night.
That's why I was tired all day.
Our clinic got back to have a normal function completely today.
However, there were only few clients, so we couldn't make a big money.
At lunch time, we had a meeting with some moving company boss.
Without confidence, he said, "It's impossible to move all your clinic's burdens for just one day. we need two days at least."
So, I was worried about it.
It's hard to not work for two days, it means the loss of income.
Dr. MJ talked to me that the boss didn't look like a professional man and we don't have to be disappointed, because we have more chances to meet other companies.
And you know what?
We met another company boss, and he told us that he can do that for just one day.
I realized again that we should have many options before the important decision.
In Korea, we can always have trouble in parking.
So many people like to use a public transportation.
See you.

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Good mrning, Dr. Kim! 

Yesterday was a very productive one. I did my laundry of over a week and I just felt like I was the Incredible Hulk. ^^ Anyway, let us agree not to sleep in during the weekend or we will have trouble falling asleep on Sunday night.

Well, it is true that considering options is so crucial on decinding matters. Since we have the free will to choose what is the best option out there, we can pick the finest one- this is only possible when we have good research skills and patience. Hence, Dr. MJ did a great job in calming you down in the hiring of the transfer company.

Trouble in parking is not a new thing in crowded cities around the world. Hence, bringing one's own car can sometimes cause more delays as one searches for a parking spot. Nevertheless, it has great benefits as well.

Below on your composition, only deleting 'a' on your 6th sentence and the capitalization of 'We' on your 8th sentence are my comments. Congratulations for thinking very hard of your sentences! Excellent job!

I will check you out in class soon.

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

How was your day?
>> Correct!

As you know, I slept for just a few hours last night.
>> Correct!

That's why I was tired all day.
>> Correct!

Our clinic got back to have a normal function completely today.
>> Correct!

However, there were only few clients, so we couldn't make a big money.
>> However, there were only few clients, so we couldn't make big money.

At lunch time, we had a meeting with some moving company boss.
>> Correct!

Without confidence, he said, "It's impossible to move all your clinic's burdens for just one day. we need two days at least."
>> Correct!
Or: Without confidence, he said, "It's impossible to move all your clinic's burdens for just one day. We need two days at least."

So, I was worried about it.
>> Correct!

It's hard to not work for two days, it means the loss of income.
>> Correct!

Dr. MJ talked to me that the boss didn't look like a professional man and we don't have to be disappointed, because we have more chances to meet other companies.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

And you know what?
>> Correct!

We met another company boss, and he told us that he can do that for just one day.
>> Correct!

I realized again that we should have many options before the important decision.
>> Correct!

In Korea, we can always have trouble in parking.
>> Correct!

So many people like to use a public transportation.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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