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회원님의 영작문

What was your best travel experience so far? What is your idea of the best travel experience?
My best travel experience was when I was 12 years old, I went on a travel to three islands for 1 week in Thailand with my family.
I can remember it clearly even if it was a long time ago and I was young.
In my opinion, the best travel experience is to collect the reminiscence and memorable things that we cannot easily forget.

What was the most memorable food or activity that you have tried while traveling?
The seafood was amazing while traveling there. We ate various kinds of seafoods like fish, big shrimps in raw or cooked with different sauces, lobsters, crab species that we cannot find in Korea and the most incredible activity was the hoping tour and snorkling. Swimming with tropical fishes in the sea was very interesting and unrealistic to me.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Helen, 
Traveling is important in life because it will open you up to a new way of living and being. You will experience new connections with people and places and immerse in different cultures, which can help widen your perspective. So much learning and personal growth can come from traveling. " LIFE is a JOURNEY make the most of it." 

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What was your best travel experience so far? What is your idea of the best travel experience?
>> What was your best travel experience so far? What is your idea of the best travel experience?(CORRECT)
My best travel experience was when I was 12 years old, I went on a travel to three islands for 1 week in Thailand with my family. I can remember it clearly even if it was a long time ago and I was young.
In my opinion, the best travel experience is to collect the reminiscence and memorable things that we cannot easily forget.
>> My best travel experience was when I was 12 years old, I went on a travel to three islands for 1 week in Thailand with my family. I can still remember it clearly even if it was a long time ago and I was young. In my opinion, the best travel experience is to collect the reminiscence and memorable experiences that we cannot easily forget.

What was the most memorable food or activity that you have tried while traveling?
>>What was the most memorable food or activity that you have tried while traveling?(CORRECT) 
The seafood was amazing while traveling there. We ate various kinds of seafoods like fish, big shrimps in raw or cooked with different sauces, lobsters, crab species that we cannot find in Korea and the most incredible activity was the hoping tour and snorkling. Swimming with tropical fishes in the sea was very interesting and unrealistic to me.
>> The seafood was amazing while traveling there. We ate various kinds of seafood like fish, big raw shrimp, or cooked shrimp with different sauces, lobsters, and crab species that we cannot find in Korea and the most incredible activity was the hopping tour and snorkeling. Swimming with tropical fish in the sea was very interesting and unrealistic to me.

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What was your best travel experience so far? What is your idea of the best travel experience?
My best travel experience was when I was 12 years old, I went on a travel to three islands for 1 week in Thailand with my family.
I can remember it clearly even if it was a long time ago and I was young.
In my opinion, the best travel experience is to collect the reminiscence and memorable things that we cannot easily forget.

What was the most memorable food or activity that you have tried while traveling?
The seafood was amazing while traveling there. We ate various kinds of seafoods like fish, big shrimps in raw or cooked with different sauces, lobsters, crab species that we cannot find in Korea and the most incredible activity was the hoping tour and snorkling. Swimming with tropical fishes in the sea was very interesting and unrealistic to me.
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