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Do you agree that smoking in public places should be banned? Why or why not?

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No, It's because in public places not only adults but children are in there. And children's lungs and skins are weaker than adult's lungs so if someone smoking in there, they will get some disease. And some cigar's smell is bad and it can permeate to furniture of public places. Also, if someone smoke in there they will get some penalty.

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Good afternoon Daisy. ^_^
Thank you for sharing your thoughts regarding this matter. 
I agree that smokers should not be allowed to smoke in public places due to the second-hand smoke that they can give to non-smokers which an in turn result to different diseases. 
I honestly don't know why some people still smoke when cigarettes don't bring any benefit to the body. 
Anyhow, I hope you're having an awesome day. 
See you in class later. ^_^
~Teacher Charry

No, It's because in public places not only adults but children are in there. 
>> I agree because in public places, not only adults are there but children as well. 
And children's lungs and skins are weaker than adult's lungs so if someone smoking in there, they will get some disease. 
>> In addition, children's lungs and skin are weaker than that of adults' so if someone smokes there, the children will get some diseases. 
And some cigar's smell is bad and it can permeate to furniture of public places. 
>> Some cigars smell bad as well and the smoke can permeate to the furniture found in public places. 
Also, if someone smoke in there they will get some penalty.
>> Also, if someone smokes out there, they will get a penalty.
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