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Hello.
I was worried about my clinic this morning, because there were little patients only.
As the afternoon work started, however, there were so many patients.
Thus I am too busy to think others.
Fortunately, my wife texted me that she was cured almost.
I expect my house to be normalized; yesterday, I saw a mess.
Meanwhile, I guess I caught a just cold, and I really want to believe that.
This saturday, Dr. MJ will come back to work, so I work alone until tomorrow.
Hence, if I can't get away from the flu, I want to get the disease when Dr. MJ work with me.
About my homework, there is no family celebration soon.
However, there will be New year's holiday.
As you may know that, we Korean have two big holidays; New year's holiday and Chuseok's holiday.
This holiday will start on 21st January and end on 24th January.
Although my brother and I should stay away from alcohol as much as we can, we will enjoy drinking and eating together this holiday.
I am so tired today, and you?
See you.

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Good evening, Dr. Kim!

Today, I guess the patients thought hard if they will go out or not because of the chilly weather. I saw one of my students go to Starbucks in Seoul today and the sky was blue and crystal clear. Of course it is cold, but maybe people wanted to go out from lunch onwards. I am glad that you were preoccupied in the afternoon. More patients, more income. Today, I went out eventhough I lack sleep to collect my professional fee from my previous hosting and also signed a contract for a big hotel for a New Year Big Bang. This means I will celebrate the New Year away from my family in welcoming 2023. 

Meanwhile, I am sure you were kidding when you said, "Hence, if I can't get away from the flu, I want to get the disease when Dr. MJ work with me."  Since Dr. MJ will come from a tropical country, he has a great chance to get colds due to the cold weather in South Korea. Well, your normal life will now resume. So, enjoy working with one another.

Your wife is alright now. That is very good to hear. The home looks and feels like a warzone when it is untidy and it feels uncomfortable. I am sorry for her to do much of the tidying up even if she is sick. As a mother, I know this because I work 365 days a year regarless if I am sick or not. Soon, your daughters will grow and fix their own mess.

Finally, the holidays call for sumptuous food and booze. While we can binge in these over the holidays, it would be great to know our capacity and limit to avoid diseases and hangovers.

Your composition was straightforward, clear, and substantial. It's packed with so many good ideas. As always, go over my grammar suggestions below. Wonderful job!

See you then.

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

I was worried about my clinic this morning, because there were little patients only.
>> I was worried about my clinic this morning, because there were a few patients only.

As the afternoon work started, however, there were so many patients.
>> Correct!

Thus I am too busy to think others.
>> Thus I was too busy to think of other things.

Fortunately, my wife texted me that she was cured almost.
>> Correct!

I expect my house to be normalized; yesterday, I saw a mess.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, I guess I caught a just cold, and I really want to believe that.
>> Meanwhile, I guess I caught just a cold, and I really want to believe that.

This saturday, Dr. MJ will come back to work, so I work alone until tomorrow.
>> Correct!

Hence, if I can't get away from the flu, I want to get the disease when Dr. MJ work with me.
>> Correct!

About my homework, there is no family celebration soon.
>> Correct!

However, there will be New year's holiday.
>> Correct!

As you may know that, we Korean have two big holidays; New year's holiday and Chuseok's holiday.
>> As you may know it, we Koreans have two big holidays; New year's holiday and Chuseok's holiday.

This holiday will start on 21st January and end on 24th January.
>> This holiday will start on the 21st of January and end on the 24th January.

Although my brother and I should stay away from alcohol as much as we can, we will enjoy drinking and eating together this holiday.
>> Correct!

I am so tired today, and you?
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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