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I am Adelina, a Phillipine girl. Today, I turned 13, and I am going to Korea which was my dream country with my brother. Oh, what a glorious country Korea was. It did not matter that there was a little smog in the air. The food was so fresh and salty just like how I loved it. Korean milk was sweeter than ours in Phillipines. I loved the Bulgogi and Galbi the most. They were fine meat and had an atonishing-tasting sauce on it. And I couldn't believe that they were all healthy! And you know it never snows in the Phillipines. But then we saw snow! We were dazed at the beautiful, white snow. Suddenly, a man came bellowing, "Bunguohpang!" It was really good because it was hot & sweet red bean bread. Plus, it was 1000 won for 4, only! After the snow ended, we booked a hotel and went straight to the supermarket. Wow, they had tons of big and helpful places like these. We bought a handful of fruits there, especially the strawberries.
Ooh! Korea sure is astounding. What will happen tomorrow? 🎎

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Hello Heather! You are so good in making stories. I really commend your effort for writing long sentences. I really love Korea foods. I wish I could eat them in Korea. I will also let you try Filipino cuisine. We will talk in class. I will see you then. ~T. Lyn
I am Adelina, a Phillipine girl. 
>>I am Adelina, a Filipino from the Philippines.
Today, I turned 13, and I am going to Korea which was my dream country with my brother. 
>>Today, I will turn 13 and go to my dream country which is Korea with my brother.
Oh, what a glorious country Korea was. 
>>Oh, Korea is a glorious country.
It did not matter that there was a little smog in the air. 
>>It doesn't matter with me if there is a little smog in the air.
The food was so fresh and salty just like how I loved it.
>>The food is just too fresh and salty for my liking.
Korean milk was sweeter than ours in Phillipines. 
>>Korean milk is sweeter than the milk in the Philippines.
I loved the Bulgogi and Galbi the most. 
>>I loved the bulgogi and galbi the most.
They were fine meat and had an atonishing-tasting sauce on it. 
>>They are quality meat topped with an amazingly tasty sauce.
And I couldn't believe that they were all healthy! 
>>I couldn't believe they are all hearlthy.
And you know it never snows in the Phillipines. 
>>And you know what, it doesn't snow in the Philippines.
But then we saw snow! 
>>I get to experience the snow in Korea.
We were dazed at the beautiful, white snow. 
>>We are dazed by the beautiful, white snow.
Suddenly, a man came bellowing, "Bunguohpang!" 
>>Suddenly, a man shouted, "Bung-guopang!"
It was really good because it was hot & sweet red bean bread. 
>>It's really delicious because it's hot and sweet red bean bread.
Plus, it was 1000 won for 4, only! 
>>Plus, it's only 1,000 won for four pieces.
After the snow ended, we booked a hotel and went straight to the supermarket.
>>After the snow stopped, we booked a hotel and headed straight to the supermarket.
Wow, they had tons of big and helpful places like these. 
>>Wow, they had so many great and helpful places like this.
We bought a handful of fruits there, especially the strawberries.
>>Correct.
Ooh! Korea sure is astounding. 
>>Right! Korea is definitely amazing.
What will happen tomorrow? 
>>Correct. What will tomorrow be like?
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