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작성자: 김*우
2022-12-26 962

회원님의 영작문

Hello, T.Donna.
This is a peaceful Monday.
Today is the birthday of one of my staff. (Is it possible to repeat "of" like this?)
That's why I bought a cake on my way to work this morning.
After morning conference, we celebrated her with that cake.
A cake with two candles, this is our tradition.
I heard that Rachel had a high fever, so I worried about flu.
However, she got a flu test, and no positive result was seen fortunately.
This is our lunch time.
After a long time, I ate luch alone.
Do you know "POKE"?
That is the food that cosisted of vegetables, fish, meat, flake, mushroom, tofu, and rice.
It looks like a "Bibimbab"; I mean other country's version.
Now I am a little sleepy, but there is no place to lie down.
About my homework, I don't like the behavior that make excuses.
I think, as a social being, we should say frequently "Sorry","It's Okay",and "Thanks".
Lying something or making excuses make others angry.
And I don't like the men who don't have manners.
How about you?
See you.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Dr. Kim!

It is wonderful to hear about your peaceful Monday. If you will have more Mondays like this, I am sure that your staff will stay and be settled. Buying a cake is a great idea. At work, we have to treat our employees the way we want to be treated. Being in their shoes helps us understand what makes them happy and what can make them stay under work circumstances.

Now, Rachel has a fever. It is only Irene left with you and your wife. So, vitamins and supplements plus enough rest will stop the spread of the virus in your family. They better sleep early and have some chicken soup. 

Lunch time has become the most improtant meal of the day. Who you spend it makes it healthy or the opposite. So, it's good to know about 'poke'. I enjoy bibimbab so I must enjoy this as well when I try it.

Finally, lying is truly disappointing. Someone who lies makes a lot of excuses. For me, I abhor laziness and liers as well. I think these two traits are interdependent. When one is lazy, s/he makes a lot of lies all the time. So, I also do not lie and tell the truth 99% of the time.

Here on your homework, you asked a very good question. Yes, we can use a preposition twice. It always depends on what we want to say in the sentence. In addition, kindly note down the prepositions as well as the subject-verb agreement below. You did a very satisfactory job on this composition!

See you soon.

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

This is a peaceful Monday.
>> Correct!

Today is the birthday of one of my staff. (Is it possible to repeat "of" like this?)
>> Correct! Yes, it is possibe.

That's why I bought a cake on my way to work this morning.
>> Correct!

After morning conference, we celebrated her with that cake.
>> After the morning conference, we celebrated with that cake.

A cake with two candles, this is our tradition.
>> Correct!

I heard that Rachel had a high fever, so I worried about flu.
>> Correct!

However, she got a flu test, and no positive result was seen fortunately.
>> Correct!

This is our lunch time.
>> Correct!

After a long time, I ate luch alone.
>> Correct!

Do you know "POKE"?
>> Correct!

That is the food that cosisted of vegetables, fish, meat, flake, mushroom, tofu, and rice.
>> Correct!

It looks like a "Bibimbab"; I mean other country's version.
>> Correct!

Now I am a little sleepy, but there is no place to lie down.
>> Correct!

About my homework, I don't like the behavior that make excuses.
>> About my homework, I don't like the behavior that makes excuses.

I think, as a social being, we should say frequently "Sorry","It's Okay",and "Thanks".
>> Correct!

Lying something or making excuses make others angry.
>> Lying about something or making excuses make others angry.

And I don't like the men who don't have manners.
>> Correct!

How about you?
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!

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