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Hi Helen, 
You did a wonderful job in giving the appropriate answers to the question and you relayed your ideas concisely but minor grammar slips are still noticeable. Just work on polishing your sentence construction. And always be aware of the grammar rules. ~ Teacher QUENNY.

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1. Describe to me your favorite teacher. What is she/he like?
>> Describe to me your favorite teacher. What is she/he like? (CORRECT) 
My favorite teacher was mathematics teacher when I was in the high-school. 
She was very kind and calm. Whenever I had questions, she always gave me a good feedback.
I missed her sometimes. So after my graduation, I visited to school one day but I couldn't find her. I think she moved to another school by rotation of teacher's regulation.
>> My favorite teacher was my mathematics teacher when I was in the high-school.  She was very kind and calm. Whenever I had questions, she always gave me good feedback. I missed her sometimes. So after my graduation, I visited the school one day but I couldn't find her. 
I think she moved to another school by rotation of teacher's regulations. 
2. You mentioned in the survey that you like shopping online. Tell me what items you usually buy. When did you start shopping online and why do you like it?
>> You mentioned in the survey that you like shopping online. Tell me what items you usually buy. When did you start shopping online and why do you like it? (CORRECT) 
I like to shopping online because it is so convenient. I cannot actually remember when I started to shop online but I think after using smart phones I started in earnest. I buy everything whenever I need something to buy because nowadays, there are nothing that we couldn't buy through online shopping. Such as daily supplies, foods, regular deliveries like milk, electronic devices, and so on.
>> I like to shop online because it is so convenient. I cannot actually remember when I started to shop online but I think after using smartphones I started in earnest. I buy everything whenever I need something to buy because nowadays, there is nothing that we couldn't buy through online shopping. Such as daily supplies, a variety of foods, regular deliveries like milk, electronic devices, and so on.
3. Do you make a shopping list when you're grocery shopping? What items do you normally buy? Where do you shop and who do you go with? Tell me in as much detail as you can.
>> Do you make a shopping list when you're grocery shopping? What items do you normally buy? Where do you shop and who do you go with? Tell me in as much detail as you can. (CORRECT) 
Yes, I make a shopping list before I go to the grocery shop. I normally like to buy some ingredients for my family's meal. I mostly like to go shopping with my mom as she lives nearby and we mostly like to go to the multiplex shopping center which has a lots of things to do for fun including large supermarkets inside.
>> Yes, I make a shopping list before I go to the grocery shop. I normally like to buy some ingredients for my family's meals. I mostly like to go shopping with my mom as she lives nearby and we mostly like to go to the multiplex shopping center which has a lot of things to do for fun including large supermarkets inside.

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1. Describe to me your favorite teacher. What is she/he like?
My favorite teacher was mathematics teacher when I was in the high-school. 
She was very kind and calm. Whenever I had questions, she always gave me a good feedback.
I missed her sometimes. So after my graduation, I visited to school one day but I couldn't find her. 
I think she moved to another school by rotation of teacher's regulation.

2. You mentioned in the survey that you like shopping online. Tell me what items you usually buy. When did you start shopping online and why do you like it?
I like to shopping online because it is so convenient. 
I cannot actually remember when I started to shop online but I think after using smart phones I started in earnest.
I buy everything whenever I need something to buy because nowadays, there are nothing that we couldn't buy through online shopping.
Such as daily supplies, foods, regular deliveries like milk, electronic devices, and so on.

3. Do you make a shopping list when youâ¢æ¢âre grocery shopping? What items do you normally buy? Where do you shop and who do you go with? Tell me in as much detail as you can.
Yes, I make a shopping list before I go to the grocery shop.
I normally like to buy some ingredients for my family's meal.
I mostly like to go shopping with my mom as she lives nearby and we mostly like to go to the multiplex shopping center which has a lots of things to do for fun including large supermarkets inside.
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