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Animals die when they become meat for people to eat. Is \'the way\' they are killed important? What

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Yes, it's important. Because when they die, they die painfully and comfortably. I would be so sad if I died in pain. I think the best way to end an animal's life is to put it in water and slowly raise the temperature and kill it with heat. Because it slowly increases the temperature, so it slowly dies.

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Hello, Stella! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia


Yes, it's important. 
>>> CORRECT!

Because when they die, they die painfully and comfortably. 
>>> CORRECT!

I would be so sad if I died in pain. 
>>> CORRECT!

I think the best way to end an animal's life is to put it in water and slowly raise the temperature and kill it with heat. 
>>> CORRECT!

Because it slowly increases the temperature, so it slowly dies.
>>> Because it slowly increases the temperature, it slowly dies.
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