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My city is small but it\'s nice

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My city is not capital city
But it's nice
My home town is not noise traffic My cousin city is big and noise.
My city is not huge not noise
MY city have too many cars.

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Hi there, Lucas!

Thanks for sending your composition. I appreciate it.  Please check the corrections and alternative sentences. 
See you on Thursday! 

Cheers,
Jean~~

My city is not capital city
>> My city is not the capital city. 
>> or: I don't live in the capital city. 

But it's nice.
>> OR: I still like it though. 

My home town is not noise traffic My cousin city is big and noise.
>> My hometown is not noisy because there's no traffic but my cousin's city is big and noisy. 

My city is not huge not noise
>> My city is not huge so it's not noisy. 
>> NOTE: "Noise" can be a noun or a verb but "noisy" is an adjective. They are two different words. 

MY city have too many cars.
>> However, there are too many cars in my city. 

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