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Hello, T.Donna.
Today is Tuesday.
Until weekend, there are many days left.
This morning, I was totally exausted, even my eyelid had a tremor.
Yesterday, there were many clients, but little procedures like Botox, Filler, Laser, and so on.
However, there were so many procedures today.
At lunch time, my wife visited me, and we went to some restaurant for a delicious food.
That food is consisting of squid, onion, and spicy sweet sauce.
I had it after a long time, and it was great, so I could back my energy.
In the afternoon, there were also many patients, but I could handle my work clearly.
Meanwhile, there was something to be worried this morning.
I checked my blood sugar after a long time, and I found out a high level than before.
I think that's because of daily beer in my vacation.
Hence, I decided to lose my weight tightly.
Today's homework is so interesting.
It's impossible for me to lose my family, so I choose to see the future.
I think you would do that as well.
See you.

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Good day, Dr. Kim!

It is true, there are still so many days left before the weekend and our energies are already level 50. ^^ Anyway, we have to keep pushing for our future. It is the nonly way. I am sure by now, you have rested very well. Meanwhile, I have to catch up some sleep as well. 

In your clinic, it has been busier than ever. For you to perform all the procedures to your patients, you really need ample sleep and some great food. It's great that your wife visited you for some good lunch. However, always monitor your blood sugar to regulate your health.

Now, if we can go back to the past or see the future, I would also rather choose to see what will happen in the future. As far as the past is possible, we cannot really change it no matter what we do. So, looking forward is better.

Thank you for your homework answer. Your sentences are variatins of average length and long ones but the messages were very clear and you were cautious about your grammar. Excellent job!

See you again soon!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

Today is Tuesday.
>> Correct!

Until weekend, there are many days left.
>> Correct!

This morning, I was totally exausted, even my eyelid had a tremor.
>> Correct!

Yesterday, there were many clients, but little procedures like Botox, Filler, Laser, and so on.
>> Correct!
Or: LASER


However, there were so many procedures today.
>> Correct!

At lunch time, my wife visited me, and we went to some restaurant for a delicious food.
>> Correct!

That food is consisting of squid, onion, and spicy sweet sauce.
>> That food is consisted squid, onion, and spicy sweet sauce.

I had it after a long time, and it was great, so I could back my energy.
>> I had it after a long time, and it was great, so I could get back my energy.

In the afternoon, there were also many patients, but I could handle my work clearly.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, there was something to be worried this morning.
>> Correct!

I checked my blood sugar after a long time, and I found out a high level than before.
>> I checked my blood sugar after a long time, and I found out a high level more than before.

I think that's because of daily beer in my vacation.
>> Correct!

Hence, I decided to lose my weight tightly.
>> Correct!

Today's homework is so interesting.
>> Correct!

It's impossible for me to lose my family, so I choose to see the future.
>> Correct!

I think you would do that as well.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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