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Do you like meeting new people?

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I don't usually like meeting new people because I know nothing about them. I don't know about their personality or what they like. Also, they are strangers to me and I can't talk to them as I do to my friends. In addition, talking to strangers like new people is pretty hard for me because I'm shy.

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Hi there, Chloe!

Thanks for sending your composition. I appreciate it.  Please check the corrections and alternative sentences. 
See you tomorrow!

Cheers,
Jean~~


I don't usually like meeting new people because I know nothing about them. 
>> OR: Getting to know new people is something I don't normally do. 

I don't know about their personality or what they like.
>> OR: They're literally strangers to me. 

Also, they are strangers to me and I can't talk to them as I do to my friends. 
>> OR: On top of that, we practically know nothing about each other so we've got nothing to talk about. 

In addition, talking to strangers like new people is pretty hard for me because I'm shy.
>> OR: Moreover, my shy personality makes it even harder for me to relax and socialize with people I don't know. 

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