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What advantages are there for a woman who stays at home when her children are young?

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It can make stability for children. Many children are young, they get stability from their mom. It's because they feel comfortable because of their mom is on their side. So when they grow up, they will be good people in society.

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Hi, Daisy. 
Thank you for writing this heart-warming essay. I agree that mothers play a big role in their children's lives. 
They serve as a light, guide and nurturer to their kids. 
I think your mom plays that very big role to you and I admire her so much. 
Anyhow, I hope you're doing great. ^^ See you later. :)
~Teacher Charry

It can make stability for children. 
>> It can provide stability for the children. 
Many children are young, they get stability from their mom. 
>> Many children when they are young, get stability from their moms. 
It's because they feel comfortable because of their mom is on their side. 
>> It's because they feel comfortable that their moms are on their side.
So when they grow up, they will be good people in society.
>> So, when they grow up, they will be good people in the society.
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