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I could see many young people who enjoy their night lives in the Korean movies.
They dance on the stage drinking alochol.
Loud music also comes from the club.
I don't like the night life.
First, I don't enjoy drinking alcohol.
I often drinks alcohol with my friends and coworkers, because I want to get into the sprit of things.
When I meet my best friends, we prefer to visit cafe to pub.
We love to drink a cup of coffee and chat.
Second, spots where many people gather and loud sound is heard irritate me.
Some people enjoy night life to be refreshed, but I prefer to do exercise, watch movies, go shopping, and talk with my family or friends.

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Hello there, Dr. Stella!

Some people love the night life while some more wholesome activities just like you. Perhaps, this comes from one's own personality. In your country, the MBTI is one of the ways to find out is a person is outgoing or not.

Anyway, below contains my grammar suggestion to your homework. They are so few, thus, congratulations on a job well done!

See you in class!

-T. Donna~

I could see many young people who enjoy their night lives in the Korean movies.
>> Correct!

They dance on the stage drinking alochol.
>> Correct!

Loud music also comes from the club.
>> Correct!

I don't like the night life.
>> Correct!

First, I don't enjoy drinking alcohol.
>> Correct!

I often drinks alcohol with my friends and coworkers, because I want to get into the sprit of things.
>> Correct!

When I meet my best friends, we prefer to visit cafe to pub.
>> When I meet my best friends, we prefer to visit the cafe to the pub.

We love to drink a cup of coffee and chat.
>> Correct!

Second, spots where many people gather and loud sound is heard irritate me.
>> Second, spots where many people gather and a loud sound is heard irritates me.
 
Some people enjoy night life to be refreshed, but I prefer to do exercise, watch movies, go shopping, and talk with my family or friends.
>> Correct!
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