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Is salary a major priority you have when looking for a job?

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As Interest to the job is important, salary is also important to me. Let's think about the reason why people get a job. The major priority is to make money. Even though I do work happily and well, if the salary is less to make my own life, I would not choose that job easily. But it doesn't mean that I want to be a millionaire. I just want to buy clothes, eat delicious food and go to travel sometimes. I agree that the money can't totally judge our happiness. However, if we have no money, our life can be unhappy. For example, we can't offer good things to my children and we have to endure hunger. Because money makes our life prosperous, salary should be a major priority when I'm looking for a job. Also, I prefer stability, I don't want to endure uncertainty. That's why I want to be a public worker. It compensates job until 60 years old. Furthermore, I want to become a helpful and worth person in this society and solve social problems. That's why I want to be a teacher these days.

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Thank you for this Mary! Yes, money is the main reason we work. :D

As Interest to the job is important, salary is also important to me. 
>>> correct   
Let's think about the reason why people get a job. 
>>>   correct 
The major priority is to make money. 
>>> correct   
Even though I do work happily and well, if the salary is less to make my own life, I would not choose that job easily. 
>>> correct 
>>> OR: Even though I do work happily and well, if the salary is less than enough to go on with life, I would not choose that job easily.   
But it doesn't mean that I want to be a millionaire.
>>> correct 
I just want to buy clothes, eat delicious food and go to travel sometimes. 
>>> correct  
I agree that the money can't totally judge our happiness. 
>>>  correct 
However, if we have no money, our life can be unhappy. 
>>> correct  
For example, we can't offer good things to my children and we have to endure hunger. 
>>> For example, we can't offer good things to our children and we have to endure hunger.   
Because money makes our life prosperous, salary should be a major priority when I'm looking for a job. 
>>> correct   
Also, I prefer stability, I don't want to endure uncertainty. 
>>> correct   
That's why I want to be a public worker. 
>>> correct  
It compensates job until 60 years old. 
>>> correct  
>>> OR: It secures a job until you retire. 
Furthermore, I want to become a helpful and worth person in this society and solve social problems. 
>>>   Furthermore, I want to become a helpful and worthy person in this society and solve social problems. 
That's why I want to be a teacher these days.
>>>   correct  

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