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Well, I believe that it doesn't need to wear school uniforms, because it's important to make up for the freedom and expression of individuals nowadays. But I guess there are positive things and negative things. First, good things are that we can feel being the one with sense of belonging to the community. Also, you can get a various benefits. On the other hand, thing as we talked with book during class, it may crease violent attacks. And it can infringe on individuals' freedom of expression.

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Nice work, Elic! These sentences show your understanding of our topic about school uniforms last time. You were able to tell the good and bad sides or beneficial and harmful sides of wearing school uniforms. Please review the corrections I have placed here. Thank you so much! Keep up the good work!

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Well, I believe that it doesn't need to wear school uniforms, because it's important to make up for the freedom and expression of individuals nowadays.
>> Well, I believe that there is no need to wear school uniforms because it's important to consider every individual's freedom of expression nowadays.
But I guess there are positive things and negative things.
>> Correct.
First, good things are that we can feel being the one with sense of belonging to the community.
>> One of the good things about it is that one can feel the sense of belongingness to his community.
Also, you can get a various benefits.
>> Also, you can get various benefits.
On the other hand, thing as we talked with book during class, it may crease violent attacks.
>> On the other hand, it may increase violent attacks just like what we talked about with the book during our class.
And it can infringe on individuals' freedom of expression.
>> It may also infringe an individual's freedom of expression.
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