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I think gossiping is a healthy activity.
When I meet my friends and companions, gossip is one of the most important topics.
When I was a student, I used to talk about teachers and friends who acted badly.
After I had a job, most of the topic that I talk with my freinds is about job.
Also, we tell about the boss and the co-workers who don't get along with us and tease us.
After I express my feeling about them, I feel refreshed.
If I receive the empathy from my best friends, I could regain comfort and peaceful mind.
In my opinion, it's better to speak out about other's act to friends than to keep in mind.

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Hello there, Dr. Stella!

As we have discussed in class, we both agree that moderate gossiping is good for our mental well-being. After all, man is a social animal who needs to create relationships with others around him. Gossip has been one of the favorite past time of human beings since they occupies earth. Hence, all of us gossipped whether we like it or not.

Anyway, your points raised here on your homework answer were very clear. The sentences were very well-made since the patterns vary.  As in the past, kindly go over the underlined words and analyze why they were suggested.

Thank you for your time and consistency! Great job!

See you!

-T. Donna~

I think gossiping is a healthy activity.
>> Correct!

When I meet my friends and companions, gossip is one of the most important topics.
>> Correct!

When I was a student, I used to talk about teachers and friends who acted badly.
>> Correct!

After I had a job, most of the topic that I talk with my freinds is about job.
>> After I had a job, most of the topics that I talk about with my friends is about job.

Also, we tell about the boss and the co-workers who don't get along with us and tease us.
>> Correct!

After I express my feeling about them, I feel refreshed.
>> After I express my feelings about them, I feel refreshed.

If I receive the empathy from my best friends, I could regain comfort and peaceful mind.
>> Correct!

In my opinion, it's better to speak out about other's act to friends than to keep in mind.
>> In my opinion, it's better to speak out about other's acts to friends than to keep them in mind.
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