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I want the public praise my outsading performance as an actress. If it is realized, it will be more valuable than any other evaluations to me.

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Hi, Judy!

This is the ultimate dream of all actors in the world. To be acclaimed as the best is the bet publicity one can get in the field of acting. If you wish to be one someday, then it takes guts and talent to achieve this.

Thank you so much for doing your homework. As you can see, the suggestions I made are about using the appropriate preposition to make your sentences more acxcurate. Overall, great job on the ideas presented.

See you later!

-T. Donna~

I want the public praise my outsading performance as an actress. 
>> I want the public to praise my outsading performance as an actress. 

If it is realized, it will be more valuable than any other evaluations to me.
>>  If it is realized, it will be more valuable than any other evaluations about me.
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