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I am a survivalist. Now I am thrown into the sea by some kind of masked ship-gangsters and my mission is to esacape the sea. The missionary center (A.K.A MC) sent a shark that has chips in his brain and the MC will control the shark with the chip. However, an MC enginner named Master Light will control the shark and she is real hard to escape when she's engineering. (Don't you worry. Master Light has made the shark's teeth extremly blunt so it'll do no harm.) So I am swimming with the most scariest-looking shark behind me and it actually scares me very much. I have my everything-proof speaker+microphone thingy with me in case I am in an imerge-- Way To Go! Master Paleont! He found out that Master Light is seceretly sick and he practically pryed the remote off her hands. Haha-- So back to the swim race. Now that a palontologist is controling a shark, it is much easier. Ack, I have to be careful not to get my lens off. And also not to make water reach my eyes directly. To be continued ^^

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Good day, Heather! Thank you for writing this story for me. Keep up the good work. I'll see you in class and talk more about this story.~ T. Lyn
I am a survivalist. 
>>Correct.
Now I am thrown into the sea by some kind of masked ship-gangsters and my mission is to esacape the sea. 
>>Now, I have been thrown into the sea by a masked gang member and my mission is to escape the sea.
The missionary center (A.K.A MC) sent a shark that has chips in his brain and the MC will control the shark with the chip. 
>>The missionary Center (A.K.A. MC) sent a shark with a chip in the brain, and the MC controls the shark with the chip.
However, an MC enginner named Master Light will control the shark and she is real hard to escape when she's engineering. 
>>However, an MC engineer named Master Light will control the shark and it's really hard for him to escape.
(Don't you worry. Master Light has made the shark's teeth extremly blunt so it'll do no harm.) 
>>(Don't worry because Master Light will blunt the shark's teeth so they won't harm you.)
So I am swimming with the most scariest-looking shark behind me and it actually scares me very much. 
>>So, I'm swimming with the scariest-looking shark, and it's actually pretty scary.
I have my everything-proof speaker+microphone thingy with me in case I am in an imerge-- Way To Go! Master Paleont! 
>>I have my speakers and mic to prove it all and put them in the case I sink in-Way to Go, Master Paleont!
He found out that Master Light is seceretly sick and he practically pryed the remote off her hands. 
>>He found out that Master Light was secretly ill and almost tool the remote control from her hand.
Haha-- So back to the swim race. 
>>Haha--Let's go back to the swimming competition.
Now that a palontologist is controling a shark, it is much easier. 
>>Now that the paleontologist has the sharks under control, it's a lot easier.
Ack, I have to be careful not to get my lens off. 
>>Ack, I have to be careful not to remove the lens.
And also not to make water reach my eyes directly. 
>>And avoid direct contact with the eyes.
To be continued. ^^
>>Correct.
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