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In your opinion, what habits should you have to have a successful life?

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In my opinion, to solving 100 problems like math or something to use our brain and do some exercise and read many novels or magazine of science is very good to make your life. I think doing exercises are essential habit for get a successful life it's because doing exercises are good to make our stamina and give some refresh for our brain.

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Hi, Daisy. ^_^
I agree that exercising our brains and our bodies are exceptional ways to achieving a successful life. 
In order to be successful, your mind and body should be strong enough. 
I hope you're feeling strong both mentally and physically. 
See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry

In my opinion, to solving 100 problems like math or something to use our brain and do some exercise and read many novels or magazine of science is very good to make your life. 
>> In my opinion, exercising our minds like solving 100 math problems and reading novels or science magazines are very good ways to have a successful life.
I think doing exercises are essential habit for get a successful life it's because doing exercises are good to make our stamina and give some refresh for our brain.
>> I think doing exercises is an essential habit to get a successful life because it strengthens our stamina nd refreshes our brain. 
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