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If I have some problems, First I try to avoid the panic state and get some rest.
I would one step back, Analyzing the problems and thinkink about the solutions.
Nevertheless, I couldn't have a solution I might talk to someone to get help.
It's not shameful behavior. I think, independent person is not that to slove all the problems myself.
Independent person know their situation exactly and they can ask for the help to someone easily.
It is more important to act to solve the problem.
It could be help to level up for me and I could get some good experience and skills.
Then I can solve another coming problems and even I can help someone.

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Hello Eun Chae!
Thank you so much for doing your homework every day.  In making sentences, make sure that you don't have two verbs together.  Use prepositions like "to" or a conjunction which is "and" to connect their meanings in your sentences.  Always check your spelling, punctuation marks, and capitalization.  Read your corrections every day. ^^



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If I have some problems, 
First I try to avoid the panic state and get some rest.
>> If I have some problems, first I try to avoid the panic state and get some rest. 
I would one step back, Analyzing the problems and thinkink about the solutions.
>> I would be one step back from analyzing the problems and thinking about the solutions. 
Nevertheless, I couldn't have a s
olution I might talk to someone to get help.
>> Nevertheless, if I couldn't have a solution, I might talk to someone to get help. 
It's not shameful behavior. 
>> Correct.  
I think, independent person is not that to slove all the problems myself.
>> I think an independent person does not need to solve all the problems himself. 
Independent person know their situation exactly and they can ask for the help to someone easily.
>> An independent person knows how to react to the situation and they can ask for help to someone easily. 
It is more important to act to solve the problem.
>> It is more important to act in solving the problem. 
It could be help to level up for me and I could get some good experience and skills.
>> It could be helpful for me to level up and I could get some good experiences and skills. 
Then I can solve another coming problems and even I can help someone.
>> Then I can solve the other inevitable problems as well as I can lend a hand to someone. 

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