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Do you agree that Apple and Google should both be penalized due to their unfair policies? Why or why

작성자: 황*하
2022-11-30 990

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Yes, they should be penalized, if they break the law. There are a lot of unfair payment policies in the IT industry. For example, monthly fee for membership service varies among the countries. Customers are asked to pay 3$ for YouTube service in India but Koreans need to pay 10$ every month. I have no idea why they charge it differently. Google and Apple are the leading companies in IT industry which has a social responsibilities. They have to help people who are suffering from the economic recession. In addition, they have to follow the national law, so they should be the standard of business. I know that there are different economic environment around the world, some people can't affort to pay for membership service due to the exchange rate and prices in their country. I think that providers can lower the price if they change their earning system. I believe that they can make money from the advertisement so, if they expand charges to advertisement, it would be possible to lower the p

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

Yes, they should be penalized, if they break the law. 
>> CORRECT! 
There are a lot of unfair payment policies in the IT industry. 
>> CORRECT! 
For example, monthly fee for membership service varies among the countries. 
>> CORRECT! 
Customers are asked to pay 3$ for YouTube service in India but Koreans need to pay 10$ every month.
>> CORRECT! 
I have no idea why they charge it differently. 
>> CORRECT! 
OR >> I don't understand why they give different charges.
Google and Apple are the leading companies in IT industry which has a social responsibilities. 
>> Google and Apple are the leading companies in IT industry which have social responsibilities. 
They have to help people who are suffering from the economic recession. 
>> CORRECT! 
In addition, they have to follow the national law, so they should be the standard of business. 
>> CORRECT! 
I know that there are different economic environment around the world, some people can't affort to pay for membership service due to the exchange rate and prices in their country. 
>> I know that there are different economic systems around the world, some people can't afford to pay for membership services due to the exchange rate and prices in their country.  
I think that providers can lower the price if they change their earning system. 
>> CORRECT! 
I believe that they can make money from the advertisement so, if they expand charges to advertisement, it would be possible to lower the p
>> I believe that they can make money from the advertisement so, if they expand charges to advertisement, it would be possible to lower the prices.
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