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How can you make your free time more productive? Answer in a few sentences.

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During my free time, Working out to keep a weight or reading a novel that i like will make me have a productive life. It would be helpful to both physical and mental health.

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Good day, Judy!

Exactly! These activities help us to be on top of our health. However, they are always better said than done. So, if we work out and read, then we are doing ourselves a great favor. Pick a book or do PIlates when you can.

Study my suggestions on your first sentence. They just needed to be capitalized.

See you again later!

-T. Donna~

During my free time, Working out to keep a weight or reading a novel that i like will make me have a productive life. 
>> During my free time, working out to keep a good weight or reading a novel that I like will make me have a productive life. 

It would be helpful to both physical and mental health.
>> Correct!
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