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This is very worrying phenomenon.

The reason of alarming is that student's health is related to social costs and safety.

Specially children's obesity has a high possibility of causing- high blood presuure, daiabetes etc.

As student's obesity incerase, the cost medical care of goveronment increase.

This phenomenon is highly related to COVID 19.

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Hello Ms. Lily!
It is indeed alarming since obesity among young people is increasing, and it is not only happening in Korea. In the Philippines, we just went back to school this year and I noticed a big change among a few students that I know, and they really gained a lot of weight. Some mothers are even very proud of it which for me is not a good sign especially when they brag that their child eats double than them (parents)
enjoy the day!
Aki~

This is very worrying phenomenon.
>>>  This is a very worrying phenomenon.

The reason of alarming is that student's health is related to social costs and safety.
>> The reason for the alarm is that students' health is related to social costs and safety.

Specially children's obesity has a high possibility of causing- high blood presuure, daiabetes etc.
>>> Especially children's obesity has a high possibility of causing- high blood pressure, diabetes, etc.

As student's obesity incerase, the cost medical care of goveronment increase.
>>> As student obesity increases, the cost of medical care to the government increases.

This phenomenon is highly related to COVID-19.
>>> CORRECT!
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