¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Are vaccines useful or harmful? Why?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±¸*¿ì
2022-11-26 1013

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I think the vaccines are middle of useful and harmful. Because if we get vaccine, some people get healthier than the past because of they get immunity but other some people get weaker, die or side effects because of they lose their base immunity. I think the vaccines has fit people with them or it doesn't fit with them.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi, Daisy. ^_^
Thank you for diligently answering this essay question. 
Vaccines are indeed controversial. But in my honest opinion, they are more helpful than harmful although not all people have the same opinion about it. 
That's is why vaccines should be studied carefully in order to determine their side effects so the side effects can be managed well and won't cause harmful effects or death. 
Anyhow, I hope you're healthy and safe. ^^ See you again in class later. 
~Teacher Charry

I think the vaccines are middle of useful and harmful. 
>> I think vaccines can either be useful or harmful. 
Because if we get vaccine, some people get healthier than the past because of they get immunity but other some people get weaker, die or side effects because of they lose their base immunity. 
>> It's because some people who get the vaccine become healthier  than before because their immunity becomes stronger. However, some people get weaker or die because of the side effects of the vaccine. 
I think the vaccines has fit people with them or it doesn't fit with them.
>> I think vaccines are okay for some people but for others, it's not. 
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
122506 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 0
122505 homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 0
122504 How do young people in your culture behave differently from... ·ù*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1358
122503 It¡¯s not good for our health. ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1127
122502 Wednesday Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1876
122501 homework ÃÖ*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1918
122500 home work(?) ÃÖ*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1499
122499 homework ◡̈ ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1
122498 Greeting Â÷*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1
122497 09.21.2022 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1
122496 What is the TV program you like watching? Tell me about that... ¹Ú*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1369
122495 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 0
122494 Seek ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1
122493 What are the possible benefits of working on weekends? Àå*¼ö ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1198
122492 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1
122491 20. Sep.2022 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 3
122490 What do you usually do on weekends? ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 2
122489 What body part or part of your appearance do you want to improve? ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2022-09-21 1
122488 Pet ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-20 997
122487 9/20 HOMEWORK ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-20 1400

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04