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Are vaccines useful or harmful? Why?

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I think the vaccines are middle of useful and harmful. Because if we get vaccine, some people get healthier than the past because of they get immunity but other some people get weaker, die or side effects because of they lose their base immunity. I think the vaccines has fit people with them or it doesn't fit with them.

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Hi, Daisy. ^_^
Thank you for diligently answering this essay question. 
Vaccines are indeed controversial. But in my honest opinion, they are more helpful than harmful although not all people have the same opinion about it. 
That's is why vaccines should be studied carefully in order to determine their side effects so the side effects can be managed well and won't cause harmful effects or death. 
Anyhow, I hope you're healthy and safe. ^^ See you again in class later. 
~Teacher Charry

I think the vaccines are middle of useful and harmful. 
>> I think vaccines can either be useful or harmful. 
Because if we get vaccine, some people get healthier than the past because of they get immunity but other some people get weaker, die or side effects because of they lose their base immunity. 
>> It's because some people who get the vaccine become healthier  than before because their immunity becomes stronger. However, some people get weaker or die because of the side effects of the vaccine. 
I think the vaccines has fit people with them or it doesn't fit with them.
>> I think vaccines are okay for some people but for others, it's not. 
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