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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. Which one do you

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I think it is better to buy my home. Because if we rent their homes, we can have some fight with house's host or the other people live in there. And having my own house is very happy to me and we can live any other interference. I think we can have more cost than rent house but we can live there happily, it is very good to us.

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Good evening Daisy! ^_^
Thank you for diligently answering this essay question. You truly are hard-working. 
I agree that owning your own home is better than renting one. I think this is one of the best investments you could ever have in your entire life. 
I hope you're doing great right now. 
See you again on Monday and have a happy weekend. :)
~Teacher Charry

I think it is better to buy my home. 
>> I think it is better to buy my own home. 
Because if we rent their homes, we can have some fight with house's host or the other people live in there. 
>> It's because if we rent other people's homes or apartments, we can get into fights with the home owners or other renters. 
And having my own house is very happy to me and we can live any other interference. 
>> In addition, having my own house makes me feel very happy and I can live without any interference. 
I think we can have more cost than rent house but we can live there happily, it is very good to us.
>> I think we would have to spend more in buying our own house rather than renting one but we can live in our own house happily. It is very good for us.
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