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Hello, T.Donna.
Happy Tuesday.
I was busy somewhat, but I was satistifed with today because there were no big problem in clinic.
As I told you, I had my hair permed.
Some of staff told me that I looked younger.
I can't believe it perfectly, though.
That's because I am the boss who hired them and give their salaries.
They tend to flatter me always.
I had the special study with some of staff who are or will be team leaders every Friday.
One of them quitted yesterday.
She had a bad attitude and impression these days, so I expected that this would happen.
That's why I was alright.
I worried about other staff, so we checked some of them today, and we concluded that there were no bad effect about it.
About movie, some movie comes to my mind immediately.
The name of movie is "Happy end".
It's about family, cheat, and revenge.
When I was in eary 20s, I saw the movie, and I was so impressed.
I recommend the movie.
I also like the action, thriller, and horror.
What about you?
See you tomorrow.

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Hello! Good evening, Dr. Kim!

It's exciting to see your permed hair in class tomorrow.  If your staff said that you look young, then it must be true, regardless if they are flaterring you. Well, let's find out tomorrow.

So, you conducted your  training to your staff today. This shall empower and make them more confident. Regarding the bad staff who left, that is good riddance. As I said before, the good ones will stay , work hard, and see your goal so clearly and they shall grow with you.

And now about movies, we actually have different preferences and intentions in watching one. Sometimes when we want to laugh, we watch something light like comedy. In other instances, we want to be engaged and we want action or thriller. In your case, you watch family movies as well as action, thriller, and horror. For me, the storyline is the most important one. I love movies with brilliant stories with excellent acting by good-looking actors. A good movie is always a combination of these. Well, thank you for sharing your kind of movie and the recommendation of 'Happy End' as well.

The grammar suggestions I made were underlined or deleted. Please go over them below. Take note that the use of commas (,) to separate same kinds of ideas need to have the same form.

For example: I eat vergetables, fruits, and meat. (Here, all of these are food.) So, "I eat vegetables, meat, and vitamins." is incorrect because vitamins is not food.

Anyway, you have done excellent on this homework!

See you!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

Happy Tuesday.
>> Correct!
Or: Happy Tuesday!

I was busy somewhat, but I was satistifed with today because there were no big problem in clinic.
>> I was busy somewhat, but I was satistifed with this day because there were no big problems in the clinic.

As I told you, I had my hair permed.
>> Correct!

Some of staff told me that I looked younger.
>> Correct!

I can't believe it perfectly, though.
>> Correct!

That's because I am the boss who hired them and give their salaries.
>> Correct! ^^

They tend to flatter me always.
>> Correct!

I had the special study with some of staff who are or will be team leaders every Friday.
>>  I had a special study with some of the staff who are or will be team leaders every Friday.

One of them quitted yesterday.
>> Correct!

She had a bad attitude and impression these days, so I expected that this would happen.
>> Correct!

That's why I was alright.
>> Correct!

I worried about other staff, so we checked some of them today, and we concluded that there were no bad effect about it.
>> I worried about other staff, so we checked some of them today, and we concluded that there were no bad effects to them.

About movie, some movie comes to my mind immediately.
>> About movies, some movie comes to my mind immediately.

The name of movie is "Happy end".
>> Correct!

It's about family, cheat, and revenge.
>> It's about family, cheating, and revenge.

When I was in eary 20s, I saw the movie, and I was so impressed.
>> Correct!

I recommend the movie.
>> Correct!

I also like the action, thriller, and horror.
>> I also like action, thriller, and horror.

What about you?
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
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