¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

What is your opinion about teen freedom? To what extent should teenagers have freedom? When should p

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ½Å*¼·
2022-11-22 1381

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Ohhhhhhh, I can't believe a level of this question. That's a tough thing, but I would have to say it will be different who are children. If the person who is stubborn and a nocturnal needs to be resctricted, but not doesn't need to do it.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello there, Elic. Here are my corrections for today's homework. As you may notice I placed corrections for all three, because I noticed that some words were misplaced and some thoughts were a bit unclear. Please study the sentence patterns and the use of words per sentence. You still did a good effort in this one. I noticed how you put in good effort in expressing your thoughts as well. Please continue what you are doing and your efforts in learning new information and styles of composing sentences. Thank you and have a great day!

- Teacher Raven 

Ohhhhhhh, I can't believe a level of this question.
>> Oh, I can't believe the level of this question.
That's a tough thing, but I would have to say it will be different who are children.
>> That's tough, but I would have to say that it depends on who the children are.
If the person who is stubborn and a nocturnal needs to be resctricted, but not doesn't need to do it.
>> If the person is nocturnal and stubborn at the same time, he needs to be restricted to go out, but it doesn't mean that he needs to do it.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
120784 homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 0
120783 Hi Gemmar ÀÌ*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 366
120782 Hi Gemmar ÀÌ*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 628
120781 7.15 homework ±è* ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 208
120780 What are the advantages and disadvantages of buying a used car? ÀÌ*¸í ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 2
120779 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 339
120778 Why don¡¯t parents do enough to stop their children from... ÀÌ*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 388
120777 Have you ever introduced yourself to a stranger in public? Why?... Àü*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 2
120776 Restaurant cater Â÷*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 1
120775 What food would you always like to buy for your family? ¹Ú*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 609
120774 What advice would you give to someone with mental health issues? ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 2351
120773 Do you believe you can be better at speaking English? How? ¹Ú*¾Æ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 1516
120772 Is cloning good or bad? Why or why not? ÁÖ*¼® ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 1
120771 What are some things people can do to keep healthy? Àü*ä ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 540
120770 If your life was a movie, what would it be and why? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2022-07-15 394
120769 7/14 HOMEWORK ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-14 254
120768 Homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-14 412
120767 What is the most common kind of crime in South Korea? What... ÀÌ*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-14 262
120766 Why do you think people are so fascinated with aliens? ¹é*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2022-07-14 572
120765 tattoo ±è*¿± ¿Ï·á 2022-07-14 217

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04