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Lifespans are getting longer. How long do you expect your generation will live on average?

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Just off the top of my head, human life expectancy will be above 100 years old at least thanks to the development of a variety of technology, and science. That¡¯s why I was told a lot that we must prepare for the so-called ¡°era of 100 years old¡°.

Is human longevity a blessing or curse to mankind?
A longer human lifespan will be disastrous unexpectedly without proper preparation for human longevity. The more old population, the more burden the young generation will bear. We Koreans have to learn a lesson from countries that have already gone through an aging age, such as Japan, or EU countries. It has long been said that living long is a blessing. We have to put our heads together so that longevity can be a blessing to everyone.

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Hello, Steve! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia

Just off the top of my head, human life expectancy will be above 100 years old at least thanks to the development of a variety of technology, and science. 
>>> CORRECT!

That¡¯s why I was told a lot that we must prepare for the so-called ¡°era of 100 years old¡°.
>>> CORRECT!

Is human longevity a blessing or curse to mankind?
>>> CORRECT!

A longer human lifespan will be disastrous unexpectedly without proper preparation for human longevity. 
>>> CORRECT!

The more old population, the more burden the young generation will bear. 
>>> CORRECT!

We Koreans have to learn a lesson from countries that have already gone through an aging age, such as Japan, or EU countries. 
>>> CORRECT!

It has long been said that living long is a blessing. 
>>> CORRECT!

We have to put our heads together so that longevity can be a blessing to everyone.
>>> CORRECT!
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