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Christmas is not only a religious day but also a meaningful day for me. I have taken part in many Christmas events held on Christmas Eve in church. On Christmas, my whole family worships church together in one place contrary to the usual because my family members usually worship at different places on Sundays, my three children go to Sunday school according to their age, and my wife and I go to the English worship department to worship.

From Christmas Eve through Christmas, I spend good time with my family, celebrating God¡¯s amazing gift, Jesus for us. I try to let them understand the meaning of Jesus¡¯ coming down the earth, wanting them to hand this Gospel down to their sons, and the sons also deliver their sons, hoping this can continue.

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Hello, Steve! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia

Christmas is not only a religious day but also a meaningful day for me. 
>>> Christmas is not only a religious but also a meaningful day for me. 

I have taken part in many Christmas events held on Christmas Eve in church. 
>>> CORRECT!

On Christmas, my whole family worships church together in one place contrary to the usual because my family members usually worship at different places on Sundays, my three children go to Sunday school according to their age, and my wife and I go to the English worship department to worship.
>>> On Christmas, my whole family worships in the church together in one place contrary to the usual because my family members usually worship at different places on Sundays, my three children go to Sunday school according to their age, and my wife and I go to the English worship department to worship.

From Christmas Eve through Christmas, I spend good time with my family, celebrating God¡¯s amazing gift, Jesus for us. 
>>> CORRECT!

I try to let them understand the meaning of Jesus¡¯ coming down the earth, wanting them to hand this Gospel down to their sons, and the sons also deliver their sons, hoping this can continue.
>>> CORRECT!
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