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Hello.
I am going through a hectic day.
This morning, I found the way to change the ownership of the new building.
Because of the tax, I had a trouble about it, however, I was done all procedures.
In conclusion, I get a new building only by myself, and it means more dept from the bank as more than expected.
Dr.MJ and I will work together as we decided at first, nevertheless, I am getting so nervous about lots of my dept from the bank.
However, I will overcome this pressure.
I was so tired last weekend, and that's why I caught a cold.
Now I have a sore throat and cough.
So, I think I should take a rest after the work today.
About my daughters, actually I am satisfied with them.
They are so lovely, relatively kind, and healthy.
If I should say something anyway, I just want them to be more polite, brave, and smarter.
As I thought of it, they sometimes make my wife to get angry.
As they are growing up, they get their own thought, so it's natural that they argue with their parent.
See you.

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Good evening, Dr. Kim!

By now, you are probably home resting. Our immune system gets easily attacked by viruses and other diseases nowadays when we are tired, you really need to sleep. Today, I slept with no alarm in the afternoon and I feel so good right now. Again, sleep is a must for your colds.

Meanwhile, as you have mentioned, you have ballooning debts in the bank. I wonder if Dr. MJ also has debts as yours... Anyway, you need to think carefully of your next financial steps because it could be risky. However, many believe in your skills and talents as a doctor, so stay focused, stay head on, and be motivated to work excellently at all times.

You are so lucky to have three beautuful, healthy, and smart daughters! If we want them to change, it is only for the better. As parents, we want to leave them a legacy before we kick the bucket. They are the future us and we always want them to do better than we did. So, we need to love and support them in all the endeavors they want to engage in someday. After all, all we want for them is to be happy and successful independent adults of the future.

Then, thank you very much for taking the time to write your composition. Kindly take note of the spelling of 'debt', the 'same kinds' of words combined by the conjunction 'and', and the correct tense of the verbs all the time. Overall, it was a well-done homework! Keep it up.

See you in a few hours. Rest well, and see you again tomorrow!

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

I am going through a hectic day.
>> Correct!

This morning, I found the way to change the ownership of the new building.
>> Correct!

Because of the tax, I had a trouble about it, however, I was done all procedures.
>> Because of the tax, I had a trouble about it, however, I was done with all procedures.

In conclusion, I get a new building only by myself, and it means more dept from the bank as more than expected.
>> In conclusion, I got the new building only by myself, and it means more debts from the bank than expected.

Dr.MJ and I will work together as we decided at first, nevertheless, I am getting so nervous about lots of my dept from the bank.
>> Dr. MJ and I will work together as we decided at first, nevertheless, I am getting so nervous about lots of my debts from the bank.

However, I will overcome this pressure.
>> Correct!

I was so tired last weekend, and that's why I caught a cold.
>> Correct!

Now I have a sore throat and cough.
>> Correct!

So, I think I should take a rest after the work today.
>> Correct!

About my daughters, actually I am satisfied with them.
>> Correct!

They are so lovely, relatively kind, and healthy.
>> Correct!

If I should say something anyway, I just want them to be more polite, brave, and smarter.
>>  If I should say something anyway, I just want them to be more polite, braver, and smarter.

As I thought of it, they sometimes make my wife to get angry.
>> As I thought of it, they sometimes make my wife get angry.

As they are growing up, they get their own thought, so it's natural that they argue with their parent.
>> As they are growing up, they get their own thoughts, so it's natural that they argue with their parents.

See you.
>> Correct!
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