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Who is the greatest woman you know?

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The standards of 'greatest' will be different to everyone. But most people will evaluate brave, wise and sacrificial person as the greatest woman. There are many women who did gorgeous achievements like Teresa and Guan Sun Yoo. However, I want to answer my mother is the greatest woman I know. There is comment that the god made mother because he can't do all of things. She really looks like God. In real, mom not only take care of us but also give love and know all about me. She takes care of my family before she goes to work and after she come back home. It means she send most hours for family. There is no doubt to say mother is sacrificial. Also, she is wise because she gives advice whenever I get in trouble. Her life and experience made mom wise and brave. How can mom give infinite love and always be my side whatever I did? I think even smart psychologists can't explain why mother do like that. Maybe all of them answer "It's because she is just mother"

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Thank you for this Mary. Yes, a mother is indeed amazing!

The standards of 'greatest' will be different to everyone. 
>>>> correct   
But most people will evaluate brave, wise and sacrificial person as the greatest woman. 
>>>>  correct      
There are many women who did gorgeous achievements like Teresa and Guan Sun Yoo. 
>>>>  correct      
However, I want to answer my mother is the greatest woman I know. 
>>>>  correct      
There is comment that the god made mother because he can't do all of things. 
>>>> OR: There is statement that the god made mother because he can't do all of things.   
She really looks like God.
>>>>  correct      
>>>> OR: She really resembles god.
In real, mom not only take care of us but also give love and know all about me. 
>>>> In reality, mom not only takes care of us but also gives love and knows all about me.   
She takes care of my family before she goes to work and after she come back home. 
>>>> correct   
It means she send most hours for family. 
>>>It means she spends most hours of her time for family.     
There is no doubt to say mother is sacrificial. 
>>>> correct   
Also, she is wise because she gives advice whenever I get in trouble. 
>>>> correct     
Her life and experience made mom wise and brave. 
>>>> correct    
How can mom give infinite love and always be my side whatever I did? 
>>>> correct  
>>> ORHow can mom give infinite love and always be my side no matter what I have done?   
>>> OR: How can mom give infinite love and always be my side no matter what I do?    
I think even smart psychologists can't explain why mother do like that. 
>>>> OR:  I think even smart psychologists can't explain why a mother does like that.    
Maybe all of them answer "It's because she is just mother"
>>>> Maybe all of them would answer "It's just because she is a mother."   

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