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Is it always necessary for a married couple to have kids?

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Yes. It's because in Korea, the fertility rates are very low. So in the government, they give a lot of support money to pregnant couple or married couple. And in Korea, many young people doesn't marry but they go out with girlfriend or boyfriend many times. So this problem was report to the news I think this is one of the serious problems.

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Hi, Daisy. 
Thank you for writing this essay. It is an eye-opener. 
It's nice that young people like you are aware of the social problems that you have in your country. I hope these problems get resolved in no time.
I hope you're having a great day. ^^ 
See you in class later. :)
~Teacher Charry

Yes. 
>> Yes, it is. 
It's because in Korea, the fertility rates are very low. 
>> CORRECT!
So in the government, they give a lot of support money to pregnant couple or married couple.
>> So in the government, they give a lot of financial support to pregnant women or married couples.
And in Korea, many young people doesn't marry but they go out with girlfriend or boyfriend many times.
>> In addition, in Korea, many young people don't want to get married but they date a lot. 
So this problem was report to the news I think this is one of the serious problems.
>> So this problem was reported to the news and I think this is one of the most serious problems we have.
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