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2022-11-19 1935

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Hello, T.Donna.
It's already night.
As always, I was so busy today.
I had lots of paperwork about new building, staff, and money.
There is no end.
Fortunately, I was done with my script for upcoming video.
As you know, I have to work tomorrow.
And I should complete the contract between Dr. MJ and I about a building.
Because of tax, we decided to change the building's ownership, from us to me.
Instead, regarding our network business, I will be out.
It's so difficult to save money from tax.
Today, we checked the number of staff in the clinic, and I was surprised because there were too many staff.
They were 28 members.
Just one year ago, we had only 15 members of staff.
Now we have a small space, so they are always crowded.
I hope we can move our hospital soon.
If our moving is done, we have wider space, and then all staff can work with better feeling.
Consequently, they will smile more often, and it will make our clients be satisfied.
I have a shoot of video on Sunday.
Cheer for me.

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Hi, Dr. Kim! Yes it's another beautiful evening.

How was your day? I assume it was super busy. I am sure it was very productive as you have accomplished your paperwork and also your script for your next YouTube video. I am so excited to watch your next episode! Well, the tax issues are always very difficult to deal with. By now, you have decided well what to do about them.

Today, I was also very busy. I went to the radio and emceed a brokers' program on the launch of my first Korean boss who opened his building property as apartment units. The view in that place is so majestically amazing. So I am tired today but my heart is so full of joy.

Anyway, 28 staff is quite many indeed. If your staff have enough space to move and work, they will not have time to monger and they can avoid conflicts. I am certain that all of you and your staff are all excited about the big move soon.

On your homework, the frequency of grammatically correct sentences was really very good. There are very few suggestions and they are mainly the use of determiners 'a' and 'the', some word order, and the correct form of word. Nevertheless, you had an excellent job in expressing your ideas on this essay.

Thank you and see you soon!

-T. Donna ~


Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

It's already night.
>> Correct!

As always, I was so busy today.
>> Correct!

I had lots of paperwork about new building, staff, and money.
>> I had lots of paperwork about the new building, staff, and money.

There is no end.
>> Correct!

Fortunately, I was done with my script for upcoming video.
>> Fortunately, I was done with my script for the upcoming video.

As you know, I have to work tomorrow.
>> Correct!

And I should complete the contract between Dr. MJ and I about a building.
>> And I should complete the contract between Dr. MJ and I about the building.

Because of tax, we decided to change the building's ownership, from us to me.
>> Correct!

Instead, regarding our network business, I will be out.
>> Correct!

It's so difficult to save money from tax.
>> Correct!

Today, we checked the number of staff in the clinic, and I was surprised because there were too many staff.
>> Correct!

They were 28 members.
>> Correct!

Just one year ago, we had only 15 members of staff.
>> Correct!
Or: Just a year ago, we only had 15 staff members.

Now we have a small space, so they are always crowded.
>> Correct!

I hope we can move our hospital soon.
>> Correct!

If our moving is done, we have wider space, and then all staff can work with better feeling.
>> If our movement is done, we will have a wider space, and then all staff can work better feeling.

Consequently, they will smile more often, and it will make our clients be satisfied.
>> Correct!

I have a shoot of video on Sunday.
>> Correct!

Cheer for me.
>> Correct!
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