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What are three good things about America in your opinion?

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First, there are various people that have different minds.
We can share many opinions by communicating with various people.
Second, we don't need to learn other countries' languages.
We can communicate with English in a lot of countries, so it is not necessary to learn other languages.
Third, they have open minds.
Because of this, we can express our individuality with others.
I think those are the three advantages about living in America.

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Hello John!
Wow, an almost perfect composition tonight! Keep it up. See you on Monday! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

First, there are various people that have different minds.
>>CORRECT!
We can share many opinions by communicating with various people.
>>CORRECT!
Second, we don't need to learn other countries' languages.
>>CORRECT!
We can communicate with English in a lot of countries, so it is not necessary to learn other languages.
>>CORRECT!
Third, they have open minds.
>>CORRECT!
Because of this, we can express our individuality with others.
>>CORRECT!
I think those are the three advantages about living in America.
>>I think those are the three advantages of living in America.
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