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1. When choosing video games to play the Playstation, I might want to consider that because it's more easy. :)
2. Playing video games makes me feel excited.
3. FPS video games aren't good for young people because they are violent.
4. Cooperative group games are some skills that we gain from playing video games.
5. Playing video games can be beneficial if you can control a time of playing.

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Wonderful Elic! You made use of the vocabulary words very well today! I am very happy about the efforts you put into this one. Please practice and review my corrections which I placed here. Thank you and have a great day ahead!

- Teacher Raven 

1. When choosing video games to play the Playstation, I might want to consider that because it's more easy. :)
>> When choosing video games to play, I prefer games in the PlayStation, I consider those because they're easier.
2. Playing video games makes me feel excited.
>> Correct.
3. FPS video games aren't good for young people because they are violent.
>> Correct.
4. Cooperative group games are some skills that we gain from playing video games.
>> Being cooperative is one of the skills that we gain from playing video games.
5. Playing video games can be beneficial if you can control a time of playing.
>> Playing video games can be beneficial if you can control the time you spend on playing.
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