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What book had the biggest impact on your life and why?

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The greatest impact that a book gave me was a book about scary mysteries about people. I do not know why I like to recommend stories to peole but LETS GO! 1) There was a girl named Ly. Ly had felt uncomfortable to breathe lately and she heard heart rates from her pillow one day and threw away the pillow. She bought a new pillow. Then she started to have nightmares. When Ly's mum dumped away the bin that had the pillow thrown away Ly emmedietly passed away. After having an investigation after Ly died, the appalled doctor announced that Ly had NO heart. ( Ly's pillow had contained her heart.) o((¢Á﹏¢Á))o 2) Soyoung and her brother Doyoung were riding their bikes in midnight. Soyoung thought she heard her brother's voice say "..that is a shortcut.. ." behind, and she turned around and there no one. Her real brother was pedaling away with a frighetend look on his face. Next morning, she check the creepy shorcut. It was NOT a shortcut, it was a steep cliff. What would have happened...🎭

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Hello Heather! It's good to know that you read books. It's quite unusual for a young girl like you to read scary mystery books. Continue to read what you love. I'll see you in class!~ T. Lyn
The greatest impact that a book gave me was a book about scary mysteries about people. 
>>The greatest impact books have had on me has been reading scary mysteries about people.
I do not know why I like to recommend stories to peole but LETS GO! 1) 
>>I don't know why I love recommending stories to people, but let's go.
There was a girl named Ly. 
>>Correct.
Ly had felt uncomfortable to breathe lately and she heard heart rates from her pillow one day and threw away the pillow. 
>>Ly has been having trouble breathing lately and threw the pillow away one day after hearing a heartbeat on the pillow.
She bought a new pillow. 
>>Correct.
Then she started to have nightmares. 
>>Correct. Then she started having nightmares.
When Ly's mum dumped away the bin that had the pillow thrown away Ly emmedietly passed away. 
>>Ly's passed away mom her mother threw the pillow out of the trash can.
After having an investigation after Ly died, the appalled doctor announced that Ly had NO heart. 
>>After investigating Ly's death, a creepy doctor announced that Ly has no heart.
( Ly's pillow had contained her heart.) 
>>Ly's pillow contains her heart.
Soyoung and her brother Doyoung were riding their bikes in midnight. 
>>So-young and her brother Do-young were riding bicycles in the middle of the night.
Soyoung thought she heard her brother's voice say "..that is a shortcut.. ." behind, and she turned around and there no one. 
>>So-young thought she heard her brother's voice saying, "That's the shortcut." then she turned around and there was no one there.
Her real brother was pedaling away with a frighetend look on his face. 
>>Her real brother was pedaling with a frightened expression on the face.
Next morning, she check the creepy shorcut. 
>>The next morning, she checks out the creepy shortcut.
It was NOT a shortcut, it was a steep cliff. 
>>But it was not a shortcut, it was a steep cliff.
What would have happened
>>What would have happened if they continue?
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