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Claire\'s Homework

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Should books be censored? Why?

In my opinion, books should be censored to young readers.
Because of the same reason as there is an age limit on movies or TV programs.
Most children doesn't have fully grown thinking. Thus, they can embrace inappropriate things without filtering them.
For instance, if they read books which includes swear words, fake facts, etc they have high possibility to believe such things without considering whether it is true or not.
In the end, inappropriate books can affect badly to young children.
For this reason I think that books have to be censored for the better reading community.

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Hello Claire!
Wow! I'm very impressed with your writing! Keep up the great job! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

In my opinion, books should be censored to young readers.
>>CORRECT!
Because of the same reason as there is an age limit on movies or TV programs.
>>It's because of the same reason that there is an age limit on movies or TV programs.
Most children doesn't have fully grown thinking. 
>>Most children don't have a mature way thinking. 
Thus, they can embrace inappropriate things without filtering them.
>>CORRECT!
For instance, if they read books which includes swear words, fake facts, etc they have high possibility to believe such things without considering whether it is true or not.
>>CORRECT!
In the end, inappropriate books can affect badly to young children.
>>In the end, inappropriate books can affect young children negatively.
For this reason I think that books have to be censored for the better reading community.
>>CORRECT!
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