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Wow, it's an interesting thing. The technology has been developed fast, so I can see innovative things easily. For example automatic driving, electric car and missile. These days, I heared an information about missile of North Korea. North Korea has test-fired short-range missiles many times. Also, I felt that it's a innovation thing to me.

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Wow, it's an interesting thing.
>> Correct.
The technology has been developed fast, so I can see innovative things easily.
>> Technology has been developing fast and seeing innovative things is easy.
For example automatic driving, electric car and missile.
>> Correct. (remember correct punctuation) For example, automatic driving, electric cars, and missiles.
These days, I heared an information about missile of North Korea.
>> Recently, I heard some information about the missiles in North Korea.
North Korea has test-fired short-range missiles many times.
>> North Korea had test-fired short-range missiles for several times.
Also, I felt that it's a innovation thing to me.
>> I also feel that it's an innovative thing.
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