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Have you ever dealt with an emergency? Describe it.

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2022-11-09 1529

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No, I haven't be involved in emergency situation but I have seen many times because of my job. The first thing patient do is seeing a doctor and take a CT scan with injection of contrast medium which is invasive in radiation oncology. Some patients are under the shock after injection due to it's raw material. I remember that the patient who was dignosed with brain tumor whose size is really small which is not needed to treat it right away but the patient decided to get treatment with the robotic radiation therapy. She was taken a CT scan and was inoculated contrast medium to venus. After that, I went home after her examination, but I got a call from a radiologist who perform a exam. He informed me that the patient had died due to side effect. I was shocked because she looked really healthy, she was excited to get therapy and expected to be healthier than before. It is right to be risky but its possibility to have side effect is lower than 1%. It is my bad experience in the hospita

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

No, I haven't be involved in emergency situation but I have seen many times because of my job. 
>> No, I haven't been involved in emergency situation but I have seen many times because of my job. 
The first thing patient do is seeing a doctor and take a CT scan with injection of contrast medium which is invasive in radiation oncology. 
>> The first thing a patient must do is to see a doctor and take a CT scan with injection of contrast medium which is invasive in radiation oncology. 
Some patients are under the shock after injection due to it's raw material. 
>> Some patients are under the shock after injection due to its raw material. 
I remember that the patient who was dignosed with brain tumor whose size is really small which is not needed to treat it right away but the patient decided to get treatment with the robotic radiation therapy. 
>> I remember that the patient who was diagnosed with brain tumor whose size is really small which is not needed to treat it right away but the patient decided to get treatment with the robotic radiation therapy. 
She was taken a CT scan and was inoculated contrast medium to venus. 
>> CORRECT! 
After that, I went home after her examination, but I got a call from a radiologist who perform a exam.
>> After that, I went home after her examination, but I got a call from a radiologist who performed the examination.
 He informed me that the patient had died due to side effect. 
>>  He informed me that the patient had died due to the side effect. 
I was shocked because she looked really healthy, she was excited to get therapy and expected to be healthier than before. 
>> CORRECT! 
It is right to be risky but its possibility to have side effect is lower than 1%. 
>> CORRECT! 
It is my bad experience in the hospita
>>  It is one of my bad experiences in the hospital.

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