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Homework

작성자: 김*우
2022-11-07 2945

회원님의 영작문

Hello, T.Donna.
How was your day?
Actually, I was bored all day.
There were not too many clients in the clinic, and I was a little tired.
There was nothing to special.
Time went so slowly.
There is something that I have to do; Preparation of You tube video, making a notice about dermatitis, and shooting an education.
Anyway, I don't want to do anything.
Maybe, It's a Monday disease.
After a blast weekend, this Monday is not interesting.
However, I have to do my job as usual.
Have you ever experienced of this feeling?
Back to my homework, meeting new people is interesting.
About 8 years ago, I lived in Gun-San City.
At that time, I learned swimming in public health club.
I met new people in the class, and we were getting closer so quickly.
We had a same goal; being a good swimmer.
We didn't care the social position of each member.
And we just focused on the improvement of swim.
It was a great time.
Meeting new people in the interesting place is better, I think.
Good night.
See you.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good morning once again, Dr. Kim!

I enjoy ordinary days lately. A decade ago, my schedule was so packed than these days. That time, I looked older for my age and thinner due to stress and lack of sleep. There was never a boring time. Nowadays, idle time is the right moment for me to take some rest, eat a very good meal or just simply do nothing. I appreciate these days. Of course, I love active days hyping the crowd and being with high profile people because it is a part of my job. A quiet moment and some amped up days create a perfect balance in my life. I am sure you can enjoy idle moments thinking about yourself in retrospect too. So to answer your question, yes, I have many not too special days and I use them to think about my future and evaluate my actions.

Meeting people is a part of our lives as social creatures. Some of them come and go, while some leave an impact in our lives and become our lifetime friends. Since family is forever, we get the chance to be with them in so many different occasions. As you have mentioned in class, meeting people is one of the things you enjoy. As evident in your weekend activity as well as the frequency of visits from your friends, you are very amiable and perhaps, gather motivation and great energy from relating with various people. In fact, I have never seen any of my students being as friendly and welcoming as you before. This can be both a gift and a curse since it demands time and effort to be with them. On the positive note, your network of people is expanding, hence, you can promote your clinic for their dermatological needs.

Your swimming lesson account is one good way to achieve a goal and also socialize. Thank you for sharing it here on your homework. As you can see, you had so many correct sentences. You repeated a sentence for emphasis and I find that brilliant. Finally, thank you for enjoying writing and sending your valuable thoughts and ideas for the day, I truly appreciate it.

Have a pleasant afternoon!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

How was your day?
>> Correct!

Actually, I was bored all day.
>> Correct!

There were not too many clients in the clinic, and I was a little tired.
>> Correct!

There was nothing to special.
>> There was nothing (too/so) special.

Time went so slowly.
>> Correct!

There is something that I have to do; Preparation of You tube video, making a notice about dermatitis, and shooting an education.
>> There are somethings that I have to do; preparation of You tube video, making a notice about dermatitis, and shooting an educational video.

Anyway, I don't want to do anything.
>> Correct!

There was nothing to special.
>> There was nothing (too/so) special.

Maybe, It's a Monday disease.
>> Correct!
Or: Maybe, it's a Monday disease.

After a blast weekend, this Monday is not interesting.
>> After a blast (last/ over the) weekend, this Monday is not interesting.

However, I have to do my job as usual.
>> Correct!

Have you ever experienced of this feeling?
>> Have you ever experienced this feeling?

Back to my homework, meeting new people is interesting.
>> Correct!

About 8 years ago, I lived in Gun-San City.
>> Correct!

At that time, I learned swimming in public health club.
>> At that time, I learned swimming in the public health club.

I met new people in the class, and we were getting closer so quickly.
>> Correct!
Or: I met new people in class and we were getting closer so quickly.

We had a same goal; being a good swimmer.
>> We had the same goal; being a good swimmer.

We didn't care the social position of each member.
>>We didn't care about the social position of each member.

And we just focused on the improvement of swim.
>> Correct!

It was a great time.
>> Correct!

Meeting new people in the interesting place is better, I think.
>> Meeting new people in interesting places is better, I think.

Good night.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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