¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿¬
2022-11-07 1905

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

What are some of the advantages of cooking your meals at home? What about the disadvantages?

The advantage of it is that it is cheap and good for health.
Also, it is delicious.
The downside is that there are disadvantage that we can't cook at home.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello Jessica!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


The advantage of it is that it is cheap and good for health.

>> The advantage of it is that it is cheap and good for the health.
Also, it is delicious.

>> CORRECT!
The downside is that there are disadvantage that we can't cook at home.

>> The downside is that we can't cook at home.

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
127529 which greetings are typical in your country?/ why greetings are... ±Ç*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 3
127528 Homework ½Å*È­ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 1068
127527 Home work ±è*¶õ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 1
127526 Do you agree that a student¡¯s bullying records should reflect... Ȳ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 1817
127525 Essay homework (04/17) ÃÖ*Çå ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 1233
127524 Alone ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 0
127523 4.17 homework ±Ç*¸² ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 1318
127522 What are the reasons we visit art museums? õ*¶õ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 2
127521 Do you think studying the grammar of your native language is... õ*¶õ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 2
127520 4/17 homework ÃÖ*º½ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 969
127519 What\'s your daughter\'s favorite bedtime story? ¹Ú*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 0
127518 Weekend ±Ç*ÀÏ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 6
127517 14.Apr.2023 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 2
127516 When in Rome ¾ç*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 916
127515 Please use the word in a sentence:1.New year ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-17 0
127514 HOMEWORK FOR 04/14 Á¶*¾Æ ¿Ï·á 2023-04-16 1
127513 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-04-16 0
127512 I think we don\'t have to put them in the jail À±*Çý ¿Ï·á 2023-04-16 940
127511 Writing task ¾È*Çü ¿Ï·á 2023-04-16 1481
127510 Homework ÇÏ*¸² ¿Ï·á 2023-04-16 1

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04