¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿ì
2022-11-05 1397

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Hello, T.Donna.
Happy Saturday.
Actually, I am a little upset to myself.
Because, I deleted all my composition by mistake after I was done completely.
Oh my goodness!!
Now I am trying to remind what I wrote down.
Every 5th day is the salary day in my clinic.
I gave the salaries to all staff this early morning, so every staff seemed to be happy.
They smiled and worked harder than usual.
Therefore I was happy, too.
As I said that, I am going to meet my friends in Gwang-Ju city.
I have to take the train at 5:00 PM, so I should leave here at least 3:30 PM.
My friends are waiting for me and preparing good porks, drinks, and other foods.
I am really looking forward to meeting them.
About my assignment, there was a friend who acted weird somethimes.
He tended to get stressed so easily about people.
We know him very well, so we are used to his weird behaviors.
And my first daughter, Irene, act weird sometimes if she has a secret.
She is so cute.
Now, I should get going.
See you Monday.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Good morning once again, Dr. Kim!

You sure had a blast over the weekend! Unfortunately, perhaps due to your excitement, you erased your composition draft. Sometimes, these things happen. 

I am sure that your staff was in cloud nine last Friday. So, we have the same salary days after all- the 5th and the 20th of the month. That shall motivate your team to give their best at work. 

There is something weird about every person sometimes. Well, we are human beings and our mood and behaviro change depending on the intrinsic and extrinsic factors around us. When children keep quiet, there is something wrong or weird about what they are doing. Pretty much, also adults. Then, we need to be keen on human behaviors so that we can manage the way we behave when one acts weird or when we are weird ourselves.

Your composition homework had a very high degree of correctness on grammar in most of your sentences. Excellent job!

I just wish you a smooth and stress-free week ahead of you. 

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

Happy Saturday.
>> Correct!

Actually, I am a little upset to myself.
>> Correct!

Because, I deleted all my composition by mistake after I was done completely.
>> Correct!

Oh my goodness!!
>> Correct!

Now I am trying to remind what I wrote down.
>> Correct!

Every 5th day is the salary day in my clinic.
>> Correct!

I gave the salaries to all staff this early morning, so every staff seemed to be happy.
>> Correct!

They smiled and worked harder than usual.
>> Correct!

Therefore I was happy, too.
>> Correct!
Or: Therefore, I was happy too.

As I said that, I am going to meet my friends in Gwang-Ju city.
>> As I said, I am going to meet my friends in Gwang-Ju City.

I have to take the train at 5:00 PM, so I should leave here at least 3:30 PM.
>> Correct!

My friends are waiting for me and preparing good porks, drinks, and other foods.
>> My friends are waiting for me and preparing good pork, drinks, and other food.

I am really looking forward to meeting them.
>> Correct!

About my assignment, there was a friend who acted weird somethimes.
>> Correct!
Or: sometimes

He tended to get stressed so easily about people.
>> Correct!

We know him very well, so we are used to his weird behaviors.
>> We know him very well, so we are used to his weird behavior.

And my first daughter, Irene, act weird sometimes if she has a secret.
>> And my first daughter, Irene, acts weird sometimes if she has a secret.

She is so cute.
>> Correct!

Now, I should get going.
>> Correct! Very good expression!

See you Monday.
>> Correct!
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
124293 Homework 12/20 °í*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-12-20 14
124292 19.Dec.2022 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-12-20 1
124291 What are you studying these days? ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-12-20 0
124290 I think so ¹Ú*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2022-12-20 744
124289 Homework ¿À*º½ ¿Ï·á 2022-12-20 1
124288 Can you tell me about something you regret? Àü*ä ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 1187
124287 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 662
124286 Homework ±è*´Ô ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 670
124285 Homework ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 2
124284 Gift-giving! ±è*À² ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 574
124283 homework ¹Ú*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 521
124282 What is the saddest movie, song, or story that you know? ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 740
124281 Homework ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 522
124280 HOMEWORK: Do you think language affects thought? Discuss in 3 to... ¾Ù* ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 4
124279 Homework (12/19) ¿¡*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 1
124278 Should religions be exempt from paying taxes? Do you think it is... ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 720
124277 homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 0
124276 staff ±è*¶ó ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 1
124275 Homework ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 2
124274 What is the longest time you have been away from home? Did you... ±è*¹® ¿Ï·á 2022-12-19 842

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04