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I think the most common crime in my country is stealing and more long ago, the killing was common crime. Because the stealing is little bit easy to commit. But killing is very hard to erase their trace. And now, the cctv is exists in our life so they can't commit that now.

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Good afternoon Daisy. ^^
Thank you for sharing your opinion with regards to this matter. Please continue writing and continue sharing your thoughts. ^^
Since stealing is the most common crime in your country these days, you have to be very careful with your things. 
I hope you are having a wonderful day at school. 
See you in class later. :)
~Teacher Charry

I think the most common crime in my country is stealing and more long ago, the killing was common crime. 
>> I think the most common crime in my country is stealing but a long ago, the most common crime was killing
Because the stealing is little bit easy to commit. 
>> It's because stealing is a little easier to commit. 
OR >> It's because stealing is a bit easier to commit. 
But killing is very hard to erase their trace. 
>> But in killing, it is very hard to erase the crime's traces. 
And now, the cctv is exists in our life so they can't commit that now.
>> In addition, at present, CCTVs already exist so they can't commit that crime now. 
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